• Binette@lemmy.ml
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    8 hours ago

    Banger pannel

    In all seriousness there is a few spelling mistakes, abreviations, repetitions and just strange bits of text (like the hhhhhhhh part) that just takes you out of the immersion. Idk if it was done intentionaly, but just letting you know

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      8 hours ago

      Mb i’ll review it. for the repititions i tried to make it more like how people speak normally than your typical dialogue in literature where you try to write more fluidly. For example: that video of the old dude saying: “do you realize, do you realize.”

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        8 hours ago

        That’s fair. There are other ways to show emphasis, tone and stuff like that, but it requires text styling. Either way, there’s a fine balance to get between readability and writing style, but you can ditch either, depending on what you’re going for. Good luck!